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Thursday, April 8, 2010

Rain















I'm not really sure this one works, and I know there are some definite kinks in the story, but what do you think? The woman is supposed to be young--not an older person. Does it look like that? Is the rain coming down sort of confusing? Should I change the angles anywhere? Should I heighten the contrast so it's not all such similar shades of gray?

4 comments:

janae said...

She looks young. No, the rain isn't confusing. I'm fine with the angles. I don't think there needs to be a greater contrast. That should answer your questions. My only thought with the board is, WHY? What does it all mean? But perhaps the ambiguity is purposeful, and if so, then leave it as is. :)

Cara and Barry said...

First of all, I *really* liked this. You had two of my favorite things...rain and red (especially red umbrellas). Random. I know. And I agree with Janae, she looks young, the angles are fine, and the rain isn't confusing. The only thing I found lacking was that I was wishing there was a frame (is that what you call them?) between the rain coming down and the guy using the umbrella for himself AND the rain coming down and him sheltering the girl. Maybe a close up shot of his face contemplating the decision or something. Just a thought. Once again, I *really* like this one. :)

Sam Ricks said...

Good call, Cara. I think that would be a nice addition.

Alicia Padrón said...

No! Don't change anything Sam. This is wonderful...

I understand it clearly as it is. She looks young and sad, and he looks old and wise. I love the change of perspectives and the drama in this. As well as the monochromatic look except for the red umbrella which is the link between the two. It's beautiful! :o)